Thursday, 19 February 2015

The Lady and Emperor of Paris

The Lady and Emperor of Paris


Paris has been illustrated as being one of the most beautiful cities in the world, varnished with romance, history and culture. The picturesque streets are decorated with artists, musicians and performers which fill the atmosphere with delight. Charming patisseries and gift shops line the cobbled pavements, accompanied by lampposts and the occasional flower pot. Couples walk hand in hand, absorbing the beauty that surrounds them, the sun dancing off the Seine River and birds sharing their harmonious songs all contribute to the ideals of Paris.
The Notre-Dame Cathedral is unquestionably one of the most magnificent buildings you will ever see. The size is overwhelming as well as the detailed artistry that covers its walls. This famous cathedral is French for ‘Our Lady of Paris’, and the name could not be better suited. The superstructure watches over Paris, and witnesses the everyday activity of the city. Until you see it, you will not appreciate the beauty of it.
As I was walking by the cathedral, I noticed that it was much calmer than other parts of the city I had previously visited, and people seemed to be more laid back and relaxed. It has been stereotyped that Parisians are rude and abrupt, and do not acknowledge you when you are eating in their restaurants or buying souvenirs from their shops, but when I visited, I could not have been more pleasantly treated. I found the people of Paris to be friendly and welcoming, I was intrigued by their accent and at one point, an old man gave me a flower he had picked from the window display of his shop.
Heading away from the cathedral, the next monument that I visited was the Arc De Triomphe. The noise of traffic, the beeping of the horns and the extensive revs from car engines could be heard a mile away. It was like being in a completely different place! Everybody driving seemed to be in a rush, no driver was thinking of anyone or anything but themselves, rushing to get to their destination. It ruined the historical beauty of the Arc, as it was impossible to focus on it; I was constantly looking around to see if I was unlucky enough to get hit by a car.




The noise and business of the traffic reminded me of war. It was dangerous  and selfless behaviour that was occurring.


Squinting my eyes and holding my breath, I really tried to focus on the Arc, but could not erase this thought of war from my memory. The Arc was stamped with names of generals and soldiers who dedicated themselves to Napoleon, the Emperor of Paris and the Napoleonic Wars that happened during the years of 1799 – 1815. Not being an experienced historian, I never knew what the Arc stood for. Normally, I would have to read or research a topic to understand it. It was a peculiar moment when I realised that I knew about the Arc, I understood it, the surroundings could not have been more suited and the meaning of it could not have been more embedded. And when I say peculiar, I mean it in a wonderful way.


It is intriguing that the same city can be full of different atmospheres, types of people and emotion. The people engaging in conversation near the area of the cathedral were in love, content and relaxed; whereas the drivers around the Arc were the opposite. Putting all of the negativity aside, Paris really is one of the most beautiful places in the world, and I am already planning my next trip.












Commentary
Within this piece of coursework, we were asked to produce a piece of travel writing, based on a place of our choice. The options were varied, and this assignment enabled me to be as creative and experimental as possible. I felt that there were no boundaries with this piece of work, it was not as though we had to pick from a list of destinations, and we could chose anywhere.

The aims of my travel piece were very simple. I wanted to successfully share my representation of Paris, and everything I experienced when I visited in February 2014. Originally, I was going to produce a piece of writing based on Disneyland Paris, as that is where I stayed during my visit. Even though Disneyland is where I stayed, I visited the city of Paris on one of the days, and instantly fell in love with the place. I considered writing about Disneyland and Paris together, before coming to the conclusion that there was much more to say and experiment with if I just wrote about Paris alone. I did this because I thought that the article would not follow a constant and coherent theme if I decided to write about two different destinations.

Choosing what to write about Paris in particular was a difficult part in the planning process. I wanted to keep it focused on only a few things that I was fascinated with when I visited. There was no doubt that the Notre Dame Cathedral is one of the most beautiful buildings, and I felt that I would be able to write about it. I also found out that the cathedral was known as the ‘Lady of Paris’. I did however want to contrast this with another element, whether or not it be a building or another place. Baring the ‘Lady of Paris’ in mind, I then visited the ‘Emperor of Paris’, Napoleon. This was a great contrast, and I thought it made an engaging and attractive title for my article. This had somewhat an impact on the basis of what I was going to write in my travel article, and how I could portray and explore more than one side of Paris. My original aim did change throughout, and this happened because I kept remembering little things that happened to me when I was there. An example would be the old man giving me a flower. That originally was not in my plan to include that detail, but whilst I was writing, I felt it would fit well with the imagery I was trying to create.

Before even planning my travel article, I researched well known travel writers such as Jan Morris and Paul Theroux. Whilst reading the article ‘The Cotswold Ways’ (Morris), I noticed that she had a very distinctive style. It was easy to relate to and understand, I think this was because of her use of description and imagery. Sometimes a writer can be too overbearing, and include too many detailed words, making the publication difficult to read and off putting. Morris keeps a coherent balance within her writing, and it always engages the reader. This is what I wanted my travel article to be like. Another writer I had researched was Stephen Merchant. His article ‘An Englishman Abroad’, was humorous and satirical. The opening line;

‘When I travel, I’m so bloody English its embarrassing’, it is very straight to the point, and the reader already has an idea of what the article is going to be about. Using ‘bloody’ in the first sentence, kind of acts as an ice breaker. It lets the reader know that I the article will not be too serious, and that it will have a natural, almost colloquial feel to it. However, I do not think I am humorous whilst writing, that is not my natural style. I think that the author has to be naturally humorous and sarcastic, in order to produce a piece of writing to make the reader laugh, and I do not think that this in particular is my strength.

Part of my research included reading a few chapters in ‘The Travel Writers Handbook’ (Butler and Zobel 2012). It covers a lot of different aspects or writing a travel article that did not even occur to me. One chapter in particular, was based on bringing photos alive, and writing a piece on photographs. This is something so simple, yet not the obvious thing to think of when it comes to write a travel article. This tip did help me, because it reminded me of the imprints of the soldiers’ names and the stone carvings of Napoleon covering the Arc. It also helped me to remember what it was really like when I was there. Other parts of my research included ‘The Global Polititcs of Contemporary Travel Writing (Lisle 2009). This book is very engaging, and lets the reader see the world in a new light. It focuses on international relations, and how they can relate and impact culture and politics. I found it very interesting, and felt that I learnt a lot from reading it.

Once I had finished my article, I asked a friend to read over it for me, to see if I had made any mistakes, and to suggest what I could do to improve. At first, the article was very factual, so my friend suggested to make it more personal so that the readers may be able to relate to the text more. Taking this into consideration, I made the narrative first person. I thought that this was an effective improvement to make, as surprisingly, writing like this made it easier for me to present what I wanted to.


Overall, I have enjoyed working on this assignment, as I feel I have been challenged and pushed out of my comfort zone and my typical writing style. Travel writing has now became an interest of mine, and I will always be noting down places I visit. 

Friday, 12 December 2014

The Events

There, perfectly poised at the side of the road she stood. Veronica Thorn, flicking her long, brunette hair out of her face, adjusting the oversized sunglasses, and buttoning up her crystal white, tailored suit. Her shiny, red lipstick glistening in the sunlight at every movement, and from her cherry lips, she called ‘Taxi!’ waving her arm in the air. The streets were flooded with yellow New York taxis, and with the hustle of the city behind her, it drowned out her call. Again, she called, and finally a taxi appeared in front of her. Thorn gracefully entered the taxi, abruptly telling the taxi driver where to go, without looking up from her iPhone. The taxi driver was a pleasant man, short and stubby, wearing an old fashioned flat cap, he was keen to talk to Veronica, and was asking her how her day had been so far. But Veronica did not acknowledge then poor man, she sat there in silence scrolling down the newsfeed of her business Facebook page, popping her chewing gum every other second.
The taxi driver had a yellow, diamond shaped sign in the front of his cab, which read ‘DONS TAXI’ in bold, black lettering. Veronica had noticed this, and finally looked up from her iPhone screen and stated,

“Look Don, I am using your service to get to work, not to make friends okay?”

Don looked taken aback, and caught the eye contact of Veronica in his rear view mirror.

“Of course Veronica, from now on I will not utter a word”.

The taxi journey from Veronica’s apartment to work, only takes approximately fifteen minutes, no matter who is driving, and the same route to work is always taken.  Veronica was especially stressed this morning. Within the past couple of days, a number of strange things have happened to her, or tried to happen to her. Tuesday for example, which was two days ago, Veronica was eating at her favourite restaurant, and she ordered what she orders every time she visits, a ‘Root Vegetable Salad’. Although, this was not quite the salad that Veronica has ordered in the past. This salad had Cumin oil drizzled all over it. Maybe this was a mistake? But how could it be? Veronica is allergic to Cumin, and if ever she is swallows it, her throat begins to swell, to the point where she could stop breathing. The restaurant know all of Veronicas food likes, dislikes and allergies, so why would the do something like this? Maybe ‘they’ didn’t…  

Something else that Veronica was a little concerned about, was the incident in her apartment last night. When Veronica arrives home from work, she likes to snuggle on the sofa, and light a few candles to help her relax. It is common sense to blow out the candles before going to bed, and this is what Veronica does every night. However, last night, about an hour after blowing the candles out and going to bed, Veronica smelt smoke coming from her living room. She bolts up out of bed and runs to the living room, only to see a small fire near the door way. The candle had been relit, and a piece of paper was burning on the candle. Firstly, Veronica thought, she keeps all of her candles on the table, so why would it be on the floor, and nearly blocking the doorway? Was someone trying to kill her? Or this is how it seemed.

This morning, during the taxi journey, Veronica was on edge and kept replaying scenarios in her head of how these strange things could be happening. It was only a matter of time before something else went wrong, and before something else or someone else tried to kill her. Then out of nowhere, a car, at high speed crashed into the side of the taxi, flipping it over onto its roof, before slowing tilting onto its side again. Veronica and Don screamed in terror, rolling around in the taxi, banging on the seats and the side of the taxi, Veronica’s iPhone smashing adding more shatters of glass to the scene. It was over so quickly. Both of them lay there in shock. Blood dripping from both faces, cuts covered their bodies, but no bones were broken. They had a lucky escape. Veronica looked up, and saw Don stuck under one of the seats. Veronica was not trapped, so she climbed over the mess of the taxi, and struggled to free Don. The seat had completely fallen off its hinges, so it just needed flipping over. Eventually both were free from the taxi and alive. A passer-by rang the police and an ambulance, so that Veronica and Don could be properly looked after. Veronica was lost for words. She sat there in shock and silence. Why did the other car involved just drive off and leave? Who was driving? And why were all of these life threatening events keep happening to her? Each day is getting worse and worse. What could possibly happen to her tomorrow, would she even be alive this time tomorrow?

After a few hours at the hospital, Veronica was told she could go home, but she had to stay off work for the next day or two as she needed to rest. Veronica rang her sister to pick her up and drive her home, after the day she has had she wasn’t getting into another taxi for a while. As she was dropped off outside her building, Veronica walked up the stairs and along the hallway to her apartment, to find that her door was unlatched and ajar. Entering her apartment with caution and checking every room, Veronica could confirm that no one was in there. This day keeps getting stranger and stranger. Veronica was going to be living in fear, in the supposed comfort of her own home. Walking into the kitchen to have one last check, Veronica noticed a note taped to her fridge. She walked closer to read it, and she could not believe what she was reading. There, written in blue ink was a note which read ‘you have been lucky so far, but til death do us part right...’


COMMENTARY
Within my short story, I chose to base it on a mystery, without it being too overbearing and difficult to follow, as I know some mystery novels can easily go off topic and make the reader lose interest. I have a tendency to base my writing on events that I have witnessed, interesting personalities I have seen walking along the street, or my own personal experiences. The reason I chose to base my writing on these factors, I because I find it a lot easier to write using a visual source. For example, if I saw an interesting person in the middle of the town, with extravagant dress sense or hair colour, I would be intrigued by them. I would then think about what their life may be like, or what job they may have, and just from these thoughts, I link them all together and come up with a little story about them. This is how I chose my main character ‘Veronica’. I saw this beautiful woman when I was visiting London earlier this year, and she was just getting into a taxi. Although she did not shout ‘taxi!’ like she does in my story, this is what I wanted her character to be like. Also, the woman that I saw was probably a lovely woman and very polite, however I wanted to contrast this and make Veronica the opposite. I used my personal experience of being in a car crash to come up with that event, as I know what it feel like to be in that situation and the effects it has on you afterwards. I thought if I wrote about this, I could relate to it, it is something that I know about and can hopefully present effectively.

My aims changed throughout the story as I originally wanted it to be based on the car crash alone, but as I was writing I wanted to link the car crash to something, and that is when I had the idea to link it to other events to create a mystery. I found it quite difficult to describe the car crash with the little word count I was given, and I began to think that I should add more events in to make it a series of events. As I was writing, I kept receiving different ideas of how it could all link, and who could be at the end of it all, which I was not going to tell the reader. The only reason I gave the hint at the end of the story, was to create closure, to sum everything up. For example, a husband would know his wife very well and what food she was allergic to, so if he ever did want to poison her or kill her like in the story, then he would know exactly what to do.

It was very interesting writing this story, I enjoy writing for children and young adults, so I do not tend to write in a mysterious way. I wanted to challenge myself and see what I could do with all of the ideas and thoughts that I had. Therefore, I did not try to emulate certain authors or story lines because I hardly read mystery novels, I enjoy reading books like ‘Paper Towns’ (Green 2008) and ‘If you could see my now’ (Ahern 2005) which are quite different to mystery. However, I think I was very successful, and after this experience in writing a mystery, I am very likely to continue and push my writing further.

Showing my work to my peers was very effective, as they informed me on what I could add in to make it more effective. For example, they told me to end the story with a note from the person at the end of the life threatening events, so I took on board that comment and that is what I did. Originally, the taxi driver in the story was named ‘Ron’, but luckily, one of my peers informed me that ‘Veronica’ and ‘Ron’ were two main characters in a popular film called ‘Anchorman’ (2004), I was not aware of this, and decided to choose a different name for ‘Ron’.

I feel that my strengths in my writing are from the ideas that I have. As I previously said that I get my ideas from visual sources, and can imagine what the context could be like for that certain individual, I am able to come up with a lot of imaginary events that could happen in their life. With this, I am able to start planning my writing straight away. If I was not able to think about this so early on, then it would delay my writing, leaving less time for redrafting processes. I also think that my writing if very easy to follow, and the language that I use is not confusing or over bearing for the reader. I want my writing and my stories to be read easily, without the reader thinking too much about the story.

My weaknesses in my writing is that I am not familiar with writing in different genres, like horror or fantasy for example. I normally stick to what I am familiar with, which is writing for children mainly. This could be because of the style of books that I read, I do not read horror or fantasy, whereas if I did I may get a clearer understanding of the style and my inspired to write this way. This is why I decided to write a mystery story, as it is a genre that I completely new to writing. This is an example of the progress that I have made, and then way in which I am trying to develop my skills, and after this experience, I am going to carry on and see what else I am capable of.

References
Green, J. (2008) Paper Towns

Ahern, C. (2005) If you could see me now 

Friday, 31 October 2014

Freedom.

Freedom is being able to make your own choices.
Freedom is having the right to speak and say what you want to.
Freedom is acting and thinking as you want to.
Freedom is not being easily influenced by others. 
Freedom gives you the power to be who you want to be.
Freedom tells you not to care. 

Little Sister

How can you annoy me so much,
messing things up with one simple touch,
yes, you're my sister and I get that,
but when you borrow my stuff, please put it back!

You don't have to fumble through my drawers,
messing things up with your animal claws,
it's crazy how someone so small can make such a mess,
and while I remember, no you can't borrow my blue dress!

Maybe you'll understand and listen one day,
and finally come to me and say,
"I'm sorry for all the anger I've caused,
one thing you should know, I've just emptied your drawers!" 

Since when has size zero been beautiful?

Since when has size zero been beautiful?

What is beautiful about being unhealthily thin?
When there is nothing there but bones and skin,
The faces of models so emotionless they seem,
Strutting down the catwalk to a melodic theme.

Since when has size zero been beautiful?

The fashion industry is taken too seriously,
Not giving a thought about illness and the severity,
Young girls idolise these models, but why?
Losing weight for a gap between their thighs.

Since when has size zero been beautiful?

The media is silly and society is mad,
Since when is a size 14 seen as so bad?
I would like to see more models with more width on their hips,
And go back to the “normal” time we must have skipped.



COMMENTARY

I was inspired to write this poem after reading an article that I had found on the internet, saying how models are too thin. I came up with a lot of ideas about the ways in which models are presented, and why are the certain girls chosen to present beauty and fashion. I have used the title at the beginning of each stanza, in order to keep going back the question asked at the start. Each stanza ia based on a different factor of models. The first is based on models being too thin, the second stanza highlights the seriousness of being thin and how these models have an impact on younger girls who strive for perfection, finally, the last stanza is going back to when being skinny was frowned upon and being a healthy size 14 was not. The poem highlights different areas of models and the fashion world. I have used a higher frequency of lexis in this poem, as I have tried to make it more serious and easier for people/readers to relate to. It is a very broad topic and people have different views, I used examples everyone can understand and interpret. 

Nose Picker

A homeless person was sitting
Finger up his nose he was picking,
In the middle of town,
Didn't care who’s around,
As the old man was sat there now spitting.



COMMENTARY

I was inspired to write this limerick when I was walking through the town centre, and I saw an old man who was homeless, sat on the floor under a closed down shop door way. He was picking his nose vigorously and did not try to be discreet in any way. I thought it could not get much more vulgar, until he began spitting on the floor as well. I thought that this character was unusual, and decided to put my attitudes towards him into a limerick. I intended to create a visual of this homeless man to the reader, as I described what he was doing and where he was, it is then left up to the reader to create their own interpretation of the character. The style and register of this limerick is informal and the language I have used is quite silly and humorous. This is an example of a different style of poetry I have written. 

Autumn

Autumn leaves whirling
Crunching as they are stepped on
Seasons come and go




COMMENTARY 
This haiku is based on the season autumn and the imagery of the leaves crunching as they are being stepped on, and the leaves whirling around in the autumn breeze. I was inspired to write this haiku whilst I was walking through the university, I was alone and it was very quiet, it gave me a chance to take in everything that was going on around me, and what I noticed the most was the weather. I wanted the image to be created of a typical autumn day, and the two key concepts that autumn is associated with. I redrafted this haiku and added the final line about seasons in order to make the haiku more relatable and to give it another meaning as well as just focusing on autumn.